Positive aspects of the opening: Timing of the Muhammed Ali quote was timed well enough that the audience had time to read it all and it's transition on and off seemed to be received well by the audience.
The audience liked the match on action cuts of Noor skipping because they felt the "rhythm" of the skipping and also like the sound bridge between the Ali quote and the opening shot.
The handheld camera work not being constantly still was well received.
Use of existing locations and using real extras.
Real sound of radio instead of a soundtrack.
Negative Aspects: Muhammed Ali quote was too small and the audience struggled to read it clearly on an average Apple Mac screen.
The amount of match on action cuts of Noor skipping seemed a bit repetitive and that it could be trimmed down.
Wasn't obvious that Hashaem was interested in the boxing and the boxers boxing style and was instead interpreted as him being bored by the boxing.
Music from radio station jumped from the cuts in the editing.
Not enough shots in the jump cut scenes around the one minute mark.
Props and costumes in the mise en scene like the glasses and shoes removed the emphasism on Noor.
Diegetic sound didn't match in shots.
Improvements to be made: The Muhammed Ali quote proved to be difficult for audience members to read so I'm going to redo the quote in "Fireworks" because I had the max font size available in iMovieHD and they were unable to read it so instead i'm going to do it in "Fireworks" so it'll be easier for the audience to read.
Trim down the length of Noors skipping but keeping in the "rhythm" of her skipping to keep the audiences attention.
Attempt having the character Shani look at his watch so he there is more motive for him walking away, also a cut away adds more camera techniques. Try it out, if it dosn't work then take it out and find another and more effective way of implementing a cutaway shot.
Make it more obvious that Hashaem is interested in the boxing by using camera techniques that highlight the boxers abilities and/or style.
Create a wildtrack of a radiostation or music from speakers because it was well received that the radio was playing while filming but while editing the sound was cut up, a wildtrack will give the same effect but will be easier to manipulate in the editing.
More shots in the jump cut sequence, there should be a shot every 2 seconds or so.
Removing the glasses and shoes from the mise en scene. I'll keep the boxing equipment and Noor's jacket in the shot to show and highlight that this is her changing room but the shoes and glasses that didn't belong to her will be removed. The camera will focus more on Noor in shots and try to eliminate props and costumes in the mise en scene that take away emphasis on her.
Record a wildtrack so the diegtic sound matches better.
Monday 28 March 2011
Sunday 27 March 2011
Friday 25 March 2011
Sunday 20 March 2011
Friday 18 March 2011
Sunday 13 March 2011
Faulty filming equipment!
My HTC Wildfire has decided to play difficult with me and won't let me upload my video log, ill re-record it tomorrow and post it on the blog before 8. Sorry for any inconvenience
-Tuxedo Zak
[spot the synergy ;)]
-Tuxedo Zak
[spot the synergy ;)]
Thursday 10 March 2011
Sunday 6 March 2011
Opening Sequence Treatment
Title: Queen Khan
The title denotes that the story will be of a muslim female and possibly a boxing character because Khan is a muslim surname and the title Queen is only given to women. The boxing relation comes from the boxing names King Khan. The title is conventional for a British Social Realist film because it's short and named after a character.
It appeals to my target audience by having a name of the muslim character and relates to an asian celebrity that my target audience my idolise like Amir Khan.
Target Audience:
My target audience is a lower/working class audience of British Asian male and females from 16-24 years. The film will appeal to them because the majority of the characters are Asian and within that age gap.
The themes the film deals with will also appeal to them because they're things that're common with this target audience such as peer pressure, aspiration, identity, religious stress, racism and gendre issues to name a few.
The film is inspired by an already existing documentry so it should already have an audience that it can appeal to:http://www.channel4.com/programmes/ambreen-the-girl-boxer
Technology: I will use handheld camera work and a mini DV to realise my production in addition to using flip cameras because of their small size and picture quality they're easy to manouvere in tight spaces and are easy to use on existing publci locations.
The few limitations there are don't affect my production badly because the poor picture quality gives a more documentary cinematography I would like.
The fact it picks up all sound may be seen as negative but in my opening there's very little sound other than the characters heart beat and the music so it's not much of a problem and I see the fact it picks up sound as a posotive because it helps increase verisimilitude.
Representations:
The protagonist is Noor Khan and the antogonist and rival are Salim Khan(Noor's father)and Joey Simpson. We can apply Propps character types to my characters although some subvert to the typical stereotypical version of that character type or are a mix of several like Hashaem.
We challenge typical representations of Muslims because we feel there are representations of real life muslims that aren't explored enough or realisticly in cinema.
Narrative:
We see the character of Noor Khan during a ten count in a boxing match. The scene occurs in reverse order with flashbacks to past events in the characters life that are explored later in the film.
We include key characters in the opening to show how the characters are at the end of the film at the beginning to get the audience emotionally invested in their characters development over the course of the film.
Conventions of British Social Realist films we are going to use are the use of diagetic sound to increase verisimilitude.
Conventions:
We will use conventions such as crime, aspiration and bad father figures because we believe that they're large aspects of society at the moment and allow this film to become something as model for people to use who want to improve their lives much like the main character does by experiecing and over coming things our audience may have.
Hybrid elements are it's a semi biographical film and sport film which mean that we try to reference real life events and have certain scenes which conform to their genres such as training montages.
Style & Iconography:
Longtakes and jump cuts are used because they'll grab the audiences attention in addition to having the scene occur in reverse order which makes the audience pay more attention to better undestand what's occurring.
The use of flashbacks in my editing is going to benefit me because it makes my audience question what's going on and begin to wonder why the characters are how they are, this allows me to make my audience become more emotionally invested sooner by showing them what their futures will be like.
The music will play a large role in my opening because of the absence of sound. The music will have cues to show certain dramatic and emotional scenes to enhance the emotions I want it to give off. The music will also benefit visual signifiers by making them more obvious to the audience with subtle changes in pace or pitch.
Institution:
Film4 affected my production by making me take a more stylistic approach because they like to use new ways of film making so it made me alter my linear narrative to a non-linear narrative.
The title denotes that the story will be of a muslim female and possibly a boxing character because Khan is a muslim surname and the title Queen is only given to women. The boxing relation comes from the boxing names King Khan. The title is conventional for a British Social Realist film because it's short and named after a character.
It appeals to my target audience by having a name of the muslim character and relates to an asian celebrity that my target audience my idolise like Amir Khan.
Target Audience:
My target audience is a lower/working class audience of British Asian male and females from 16-24 years. The film will appeal to them because the majority of the characters are Asian and within that age gap.
The themes the film deals with will also appeal to them because they're things that're common with this target audience such as peer pressure, aspiration, identity, religious stress, racism and gendre issues to name a few.
The film is inspired by an already existing documentry so it should already have an audience that it can appeal to:http://www.channel4.com/programmes/ambreen-the-girl-boxer
Technology: I will use handheld camera work and a mini DV to realise my production in addition to using flip cameras because of their small size and picture quality they're easy to manouvere in tight spaces and are easy to use on existing publci locations.
The few limitations there are don't affect my production badly because the poor picture quality gives a more documentary cinematography I would like.
The fact it picks up all sound may be seen as negative but in my opening there's very little sound other than the characters heart beat and the music so it's not much of a problem and I see the fact it picks up sound as a posotive because it helps increase verisimilitude.
Representations:
The protagonist is Noor Khan and the antogonist and rival are Salim Khan(Noor's father)and Joey Simpson. We can apply Propps character types to my characters although some subvert to the typical stereotypical version of that character type or are a mix of several like Hashaem.
We challenge typical representations of Muslims because we feel there are representations of real life muslims that aren't explored enough or realisticly in cinema.
Narrative:
We see the character of Noor Khan during a ten count in a boxing match. The scene occurs in reverse order with flashbacks to past events in the characters life that are explored later in the film.
We include key characters in the opening to show how the characters are at the end of the film at the beginning to get the audience emotionally invested in their characters development over the course of the film.
Conventions of British Social Realist films we are going to use are the use of diagetic sound to increase verisimilitude.
Conventions:
We will use conventions such as crime, aspiration and bad father figures because we believe that they're large aspects of society at the moment and allow this film to become something as model for people to use who want to improve their lives much like the main character does by experiecing and over coming things our audience may have.
Hybrid elements are it's a semi biographical film and sport film which mean that we try to reference real life events and have certain scenes which conform to their genres such as training montages.
Style & Iconography:
Longtakes and jump cuts are used because they'll grab the audiences attention in addition to having the scene occur in reverse order which makes the audience pay more attention to better undestand what's occurring.
The use of flashbacks in my editing is going to benefit me because it makes my audience question what's going on and begin to wonder why the characters are how they are, this allows me to make my audience become more emotionally invested sooner by showing them what their futures will be like.
The music will play a large role in my opening because of the absence of sound. The music will have cues to show certain dramatic and emotional scenes to enhance the emotions I want it to give off. The music will also benefit visual signifiers by making them more obvious to the audience with subtle changes in pace or pitch.
Institution:
Film4 affected my production by making me take a more stylistic approach because they like to use new ways of film making so it made me alter my linear narrative to a non-linear narrative.
Thursday 3 March 2011
Analysis Of Comments
Title:From the comments we have decided to go with title "Queen Khan" because our peers and ourselves thought it had a better relation with the film and it also gives a hint about what the film will be about. This is also because of previous famous Asian boxers , people will assume the film is about a male which adds to the controversy.
The name 'Khan' translates into the word king, this controversial title will appeal to our target audience because they will want to find out more about the ' Queen of kings'One Page Treatment
Queen Khan
"Noor Khan is on the rocky road to boxing success fighting both her Muslim family and community to lay her hands on her boxing glory dream."- Kuma On A Cloud Pictures
Our target audience is a British Asian audience of both males and females aging from the range of 16-24, although that is our target audience we're also attempting to make the film appeal to fans of British Social realist cinema in addition to people interested in biographical films and boxing.
To appeal to our British Asian audience we have characters and locations which will be familiar to the audience.
We also have story elements and events in the story which hopefully our audience can relate to; Muslim girls not supposed to be showing skin, conforming or rejecting to the idea of wearing a head scarf. We would like to use language that our British Asian audience will be familiar because it will add to the verisimilitude and will help our target audience relate to the characters easier.
Locations we see in the film that the Asian community may be familiar with include the family going to their relatives houses and going to the mosque.
We also have chosen that for exterior shots such as when Noor goes to the shops with her older brother Hashaem we decided that we will film in existing locations that have a high population of Asian citizens such as Ilford because it adds to the realism.
We have also targeted this audience because the themes of aspiration, pressure from older siblings and parents is something that is very common within the age group of our target audience. Our two primary protagonists Noor and Hashaem both represent a gender of our target audience and the characters ages will appeal to the target audience because they're in the same age range- Noor is 17, Hashaem is 23.
The film was inspired by the real life story of amateur youth female Muslim boxer Ambreen Sadiq so the story will appeal to fans of biographical films because it is largely based on real life events of an actual person.
The film will appeal to boxing fans because the film not just shows life like boxing fights along with an accurate portrayal of how it feels to be an actual boxer in a fight but it lets the audience see what happens behind closed doors for boxers in addition to struggles they have to endure while preparing for fights.
The film will try and explore aspects of boxing not usually seen in films like what happens in training camps and how a typical day off for a boxer works; what they do,eat and think while not training or fighting.
Boxing films don't often explore boxing from a female perspective so I think boxing through the eyes of a female protagonist will not just appeal to male boxing fans but also female boxing fans.
Our target audience is a British Asian audience of both males and females aging from the range of 16-24, although that is our target audience we're also attempting to make the film appeal to fans of British Social realist cinema in addition to people interested in biographical films and boxing.
To appeal to our British Asian audience we have characters and locations which will be familiar to the audience.
We also have story elements and events in the story which hopefully our audience can relate to; Muslim girls not supposed to be showing skin, conforming or rejecting to the idea of wearing a head scarf. We would like to use language that our British Asian audience will be familiar because it will add to the verisimilitude and will help our target audience relate to the characters easier.
Locations we see in the film that the Asian community may be familiar with include the family going to their relatives houses and going to the mosque.
We also have chosen that for exterior shots such as when Noor goes to the shops with her older brother Hashaem we decided that we will film in existing locations that have a high population of Asian citizens such as Ilford because it adds to the realism.
We have also targeted this audience because the themes of aspiration, pressure from older siblings and parents is something that is very common within the age group of our target audience. Our two primary protagonists Noor and Hashaem both represent a gender of our target audience and the characters ages will appeal to the target audience because they're in the same age range- Noor is 17, Hashaem is 23.
The film was inspired by the real life story of amateur youth female Muslim boxer Ambreen Sadiq so the story will appeal to fans of biographical films because it is largely based on real life events of an actual person.
The film will appeal to boxing fans because the film not just shows life like boxing fights along with an accurate portrayal of how it feels to be an actual boxer in a fight but it lets the audience see what happens behind closed doors for boxers in addition to struggles they have to endure while preparing for fights.
The film will try and explore aspects of boxing not usually seen in films like what happens in training camps and how a typical day off for a boxer works; what they do,eat and think while not training or fighting.
Boxing films don't often explore boxing from a female perspective so I think boxing through the eyes of a female protagonist will not just appeal to male boxing fans but also female boxing fans.
Outline of Film:
*The film begins with Noor on the floor of a boxing ring during the most important fight of her life; a title fight for female boxers in her age and weight division between her and her rival Joey Simpson. Occurring in reverse order we see how Noor was brought to the floor while being introduced to key characters and seeing key moments of the film that include these characters.
*The film then returns to the past-three months before the actual fight.
*Noor Khan is an amateur female muslim boxer who is trained by her British Dominican trainer Anthony Clarke.
*Noor's older brother Hashaem is released from a two year sentence for GBH early for good behaviour and has returned home to try and sort things out with his family and try to become a better brother to his sister by supporting her.
*Noor takes a week off school after her mother gives birth to her younger brother and becomes sick. During this time her father and brother beging to argue more frequently because Hashaem supports Noor in boxing and her father Salim does not.
*When Noor goes back to school her best friend Rav (a sikh teenager) tells her that most of her muslim friends are trying to avoid her because their parents don't want them related to such a "rebellious child".These friends include Noor's close Mariam who is constantly avoiding Noor.
*During a training session with Anthony Noor finds out that she's won a spot on a female amateur youth Great Britain boxer trainging camp. she accepts after her brother and Hashaem advise this.
*Hashaem and Salim argue again with the arguement turning into a small fight because Salim believes Hashaem undermines him as an authority figure.
*Noor goes to the training camp and is in constant conflict between the boxing ambassador and trainer Zoe because of Noor's headstrong attitude. The conflict isn't helped by another girl at the camp Angela who is constantly trying to provoke Noor into a fight.
*During a sparring warm up Noor and Angela's warm up gets out of hand and becomes a fight after Noor seems to get the upper hand Noor is pulled off by Zoe who begins to punish Noor.
*Noor calls Hashaem to pick her up early from the camp calling it a waste of time.
*On the car ride home she finds out from Hashaem that their father has disowned Hashaem because he's a bad role model and is tearing this family apart with his violent nature and influence on Noor. He's now staying with Anthony and that she'll see less of him.
*When Noor gets home Salim tells her that she has to choose between her boxing and her family and that if she goes ahead with the fight she'll join Hashaem in being disowned.
*At school Noor tries talking to Mariam and her other friends and they tell her that they can't be friends anymore because their parents don't want them to be associated with her. When Noor tries telling them it's their choice to be friends with her Mariam says that she's a bad muslim for showing all her flesh in the ring.
*Noor bunks the rest of school and when Rav tries to console her after training she pushes him away. Noor and Anthony have a heart to heart where Noor says she feels alone and that everyone is just wanting her to give up or fail.
*Anthony calls Hashaem and at his flat says that Noor needs to support and that Hashaem needs to do all he can to support his younger sister.
*During the final week of training Hashaem gets a small minority of muslims from the asian community and Noor's school friends and teachers to come and her support her at her fight.
*Noor goes into her fight not knowing the support she'll receive and after a few knocks to the floor from both Joey Simpson and Noor it goes to judges decision.
*Noor wins by points and is given the title.
*Noor in an after fight interview says she hopes that this minority of muslims supporting her will grow and that she hopes her father will support her in the future.
*The film begins with Noor on the floor of a boxing ring during the most important fight of her life; a title fight for female boxers in her age and weight division between her and her rival Joey Simpson. Occurring in reverse order we see how Noor was brought to the floor while being introduced to key characters and seeing key moments of the film that include these characters.
*The film then returns to the past-three months before the actual fight.
*Noor Khan is an amateur female muslim boxer who is trained by her British Dominican trainer Anthony Clarke.
*Noor's older brother Hashaem is released from a two year sentence for GBH early for good behaviour and has returned home to try and sort things out with his family and try to become a better brother to his sister by supporting her.
*Noor takes a week off school after her mother gives birth to her younger brother and becomes sick. During this time her father and brother beging to argue more frequently because Hashaem supports Noor in boxing and her father Salim does not.
*When Noor goes back to school her best friend Rav (a sikh teenager) tells her that most of her muslim friends are trying to avoid her because their parents don't want them related to such a "rebellious child".These friends include Noor's close Mariam who is constantly avoiding Noor.
*During a training session with Anthony Noor finds out that she's won a spot on a female amateur youth Great Britain boxer trainging camp. she accepts after her brother and Hashaem advise this.
*Hashaem and Salim argue again with the arguement turning into a small fight because Salim believes Hashaem undermines him as an authority figure.
*Noor goes to the training camp and is in constant conflict between the boxing ambassador and trainer Zoe because of Noor's headstrong attitude. The conflict isn't helped by another girl at the camp Angela who is constantly trying to provoke Noor into a fight.
*During a sparring warm up Noor and Angela's warm up gets out of hand and becomes a fight after Noor seems to get the upper hand Noor is pulled off by Zoe who begins to punish Noor.
*Noor calls Hashaem to pick her up early from the camp calling it a waste of time.
*On the car ride home she finds out from Hashaem that their father has disowned Hashaem because he's a bad role model and is tearing this family apart with his violent nature and influence on Noor. He's now staying with Anthony and that she'll see less of him.
*When Noor gets home Salim tells her that she has to choose between her boxing and her family and that if she goes ahead with the fight she'll join Hashaem in being disowned.
*At school Noor tries talking to Mariam and her other friends and they tell her that they can't be friends anymore because their parents don't want them to be associated with her. When Noor tries telling them it's their choice to be friends with her Mariam says that she's a bad muslim for showing all her flesh in the ring.
*Noor bunks the rest of school and when Rav tries to console her after training she pushes him away. Noor and Anthony have a heart to heart where Noor says she feels alone and that everyone is just wanting her to give up or fail.
*Anthony calls Hashaem and at his flat says that Noor needs to support and that Hashaem needs to do all he can to support his younger sister.
*During the final week of training Hashaem gets a small minority of muslims from the asian community and Noor's school friends and teachers to come and her support her at her fight.
*Noor goes into her fight not knowing the support she'll receive and after a few knocks to the floor from both Joey Simpson and Noor it goes to judges decision.
*Noor wins by points and is given the title.
*Noor in an after fight interview says she hopes that this minority of muslims supporting her will grow and that she hopes her father will support her in the future.
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